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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
fanfic reveiw thread. Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 5:25:33 PM #236575 Perm Link
instead of intruding on a persons story.

i thought it'd be good to have this.

we can't fave stories like on fanfiction.net but maybe if we had this we could boost others confidence and get others on the site to read others stories ^_^

here's how it goes.

state what your reveiwing, who the author of it is and type away.

also, maybe in future we can post fanart for others to see.

because i've seen it done for deviantart and fanfiction.net stories, so why not ours! now who's with me~!?

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Rayyyy Avatar I mean YOLO right? Joined: May 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 31277 Rep: PIP Level 3 (197395)PIP Level 3 (197395)PIP Level 3 (197395)PIP Level 2 (197395)PIP Level 2 (197395)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 5:28:54 PM #236576 Perm Link
This is awesome! Huge Grin

Well, currently I am reading "the rabbit hole" by chesh! I absolutely love it! The writing style is unique and the story is something different. It's an all around amazing story! I also can't wait for more to be posted on it XD

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(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 5:29:03 PM #236577 Perm Link
thats a pretty good idea~

Have a great day!
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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 5:31:18 PM #236578 Perm Link
work of fiction: a world like no other.
by: alle~

reveiw:

ok. as much as i'd like to know what's going on because i have a few theories XD.

i'd also like to see more work on it, the idea of a conscience being able to have it's own concscience is a rather new turn in fiction i must say.

also i'd like to congratulate you on perhaps an amazing idea of putting images to go with it.

i may attempt to do that in future~

as always. INSPIRED ;D

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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 5:32:54 PM #236579 Perm Link
:O glad you think that aimee! i thought the site was lacking something!

and :O *hugs* thankies alle~

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Rayyyy Avatar I mean YOLO right? Joined: May 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 31277 Rep: PIP Level 3 (197395)PIP Level 3 (197395)PIP Level 3 (197395)PIP Level 2 (197395)PIP Level 2 (197395)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 5:35:14 PM #236580 Perm Link
Hahaha thanks! XD

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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 5:36:42 PM #236581 Perm Link
pfffft you desrve eeeet!

motivation. i have it!

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Sguall Avatar if you are me, then you understand Joined: January 18, 2012 Status: Offline Posts: 1830 Rep: PIP Level 2 (22473)PIP Level 2 (22473)PIP Level 2 (22473)PIP Level 2 (22473)PIP Level 2 (22473)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 6:49:43 PM #236583 Perm Link
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work of fiction: a world like no other.
by: alle~

reveiw:

ok. as much as i'd like to know what's going on because i have a few theories XD.

i'd also like to see more work on it, the idea of a conscience being able to have it's own concscience is a rather new turn in fiction i must say.

also i'd like to congratulate you on perhaps an amazing idea of putting images to go with it.

i may attempt to do that in future~

as always. INSPIRED ;D

not really an original idea,someones already done it
youtube.com/watch?v=5GrmJo7xx6c
2:45

you beating me, with your whole gang. sure, but i don't think thats fare... to you guys
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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 6:55:23 PM #236584 Perm Link
it's an original idea on here.

don't get others hopes down.

constructive criticism please.

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Sguall Avatar if you are me, then you understand Joined: January 18, 2012 Status: Offline Posts: 1830 Rep: PIP Level 2 (22473)PIP Level 2 (22473)PIP Level 2 (22473)PIP Level 2 (22473)PIP Level 2 (22473)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 7:02:55 PM #236585 Perm Link
geez, i was just saying

you beating me, with your whole gang. sure, but i don't think thats fare... to you guys
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Rayyyy Avatar I mean YOLO right? Joined: May 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 31277 Rep: PIP Level 3 (197395)PIP Level 3 (197395)PIP Level 3 (197395)PIP Level 2 (197395)PIP Level 2 (197395)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 7:10:34 PM #236586 Perm Link
I don't even watch that show XD

And there is a big difference since my chara's conscience didn't actually come alive. It actually wasn't even his conscience. My chara is schizophrenic and has dementia so he hears voices.

Just sayin' ^_^

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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 7:30:59 PM #236588 Perm Link
see :3

also feel free to update reveiws XD

doesn't have to be just 1.

and make sure to help le authors out with constructive criticism!

no negative stuff!

just thought i'd clear that one up though i thought it to be obvious.

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Holmes Avatar Elementary Joined: May 12, 2008 Status: Offline Posts: 12821 Rep: PIP Level 3 (154536)PIP Level 3 (154536)PIP Level 2 (154536)PIP Level 2 (154536)PIP Level 2 (154536)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 8:01:34 PM #236592 Perm Link
no cratics for my Kingdom Hearts fanfic?Ok. Sad

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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 8:09:29 PM #236593 Perm Link
sorry hun i've not read it yet~

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(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 8:19:02 PM #236597 Perm Link
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your kingdom herts fan fic as been awsome holmes

you beating me, with your whole gang. sure, but i don't think thats fare... to you guys
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(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 8:46:50 PM #236602 Perm Link
work of fiction: kingdom hearts: memories of nobody.
author: holmes.

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i like the memories. it's differant from usuall kingdom hearts paths.

i don't like the fact that riku's the master ( but that's just me because y'know if he were real, i'd be all over him. and if it's like how many years after kh2 or potentially dream drop distance, then he has to look old. and i'd rather keep him the way he is but that's just me XD )

i feel you're over doing it a bit on the trio. it seems a bit much like birth by sleep, but the fact that you've chosen the darkest heart to go with maleficent evens it out.

i muchly prefer the warrior of heart than the princess... but then again i hate kairi ¦D

the memories i think though should maybe become clearer as it goes on, like instead of just a few words or a scentance or two, they get to see a sequance of memories pertaining to a certain moment if you get what i mean.

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(No Title) Old Mon Feb 6, 2012 9:48:14 PM #236609 Perm Link
Hey, no one has read my HP fanfic?

"Nobody roots for Goliath."
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Holmes Avatar Elementary Joined: May 12, 2008 Status: Offline Posts: 12821 Rep: PIP Level 3 (154536)PIP Level 3 (154536)PIP Level 2 (154536)PIP Level 2 (154536)PIP Level 2 (154536)
(No Title) Old Tue Feb 7, 2012 7:54:21 AM #236644 Perm Link
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I had planned the memories to become clearer as he dealved into them. And the stronger memories he will even get to interact with. And as for Riku, I don't want to give to much away, let's just say some people never change.

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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
(No Title) Old Tue Feb 7, 2012 8:06:07 AM #236645 Perm Link
yaaay i don't have to imagine him old and decrepid Huge Grin

but the interacting with memories i like ¦D

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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
(No Title) Old Tue Feb 7, 2012 3:39:10 PM #236653 Perm Link
also holmes i'd love to have a reveiw from you on mine at some point ¦D

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(No Title) Old Tue Feb 7, 2012 4:05:16 PM #236654 Perm Link
work of fiction:the rabbit hole
Arthur: Cheshire_kitty_cat

I love the Idea that she knows what is happening to her, but at the same time has no Idea why it is happening. the voice is also a nice touch.

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(No Title) Old Tue Feb 7, 2012 4:47:02 PM #236660 Perm Link
( the voice, you'll see more of as it goes on, but for specific reasons i've put that in this story.

and yes the whole idea is that she knows the place and the things going on but at the same time, it's not her.

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(No Title) Old Tue Feb 7, 2012 4:59:38 PM #236663 Perm Link
any one read my khr fanfic?? not an origanail idea since it is based off of something but still Razz

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(No Title) Old Wed Feb 8, 2012 1:51:44 AM #236752 Perm Link
I'd post my stories, but the 5000 character limit is quite limiting, so I won't.

I fold for team 52482. Do you fold@home?
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(No Title) Old Wed Feb 8, 2012 2:29:46 PM #236768 Perm Link
work of fiction: team 16
author: HOLMES

great fan fic good idea i like the action sequences and comedic moments

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(No Title) Old Wed Feb 8, 2012 2:37:17 PM #236769 Perm Link
work of fiction: the Rabbit hole
Author: cheshire

great fan fic real suspenseful i see the similar elements to the traditional Alice in wonderland but its different at the same time. well written shows your high intelligence and grammar is impeccable

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cheshire_kitty_cat Avatar we're all mad here~! Joined: December 2, 2010 Status: Offline Posts: 12304 Rep: PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 3 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)PIP Level 2 (113137)
(No Title) Old Wed Feb 8, 2012 2:49:36 PM #236770 Perm Link
BLOODY HELL! i would say i'm speechless but as i type, i'm pretty muchly monologing it XD

i have tried to keep some elements as similar to the original as possible.

but never once havei seen the idea of the duchesses baby being like a catboy ( only in this case.....

nanananananananananana pig girl! )

when i finish each post, i don't just go back and read them, i speak them aloud.

because it's important to me that you guys who read it as much as i do when i'm not only writing it and reading it through.

but as much as i do when i put my soul into it when i voice it out loud.

so thank you zen ^_^

and intelligent? :O

impeccable grammar?!

HAVE YOU READ A THING I'VE EVER WROTE IN RPS BOY?!

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(No Title) Old Wed Feb 8, 2012 4:23:59 PM #236774 Perm Link
I totally agree with Zen!!

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(No Title) Old Wed Feb 8, 2012 4:43:50 PM #236775 Perm Link
XD well i'm trying for an update a day for a whole week ¦D

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(No Title) Old Wed Feb 8, 2012 4:44:59 PM #236776 Perm Link
Hahaha sounds awesome!

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