song writting

i've been writing a new song tell me what you think about it so far

[Verse One]
Seconds after i've been swept of my feet
Open through the doors and in steps the beat
Complete with medical packs and four fours
Looked at me and said "damn this nigga needs guards"
Bored,apart in the streets he got beat
The meat, a disinfranchised he left wheat
Me, these images i could'nt ignore
personas of the rythm who just walked through the store
This man's slim,sported a red glim noticing damage within
We remove bullets and pack skin
The kick drum slur reopen my eyes,he say don't worry
At the clerk he say don't fire rounds in the flurry
and i have it bad, tied the hostages with this gat
told em break the fuck out and never look back
they have the form like meiogyfor the kamigaze
then they got me out walking past the local paparazzi
i see y'all reanimated, sure kick get damned a flazor
We came to save ya and we came to pull back the data
i repay a major situation across town, my music as lost sound
cause they had as locked down
They meaning sucka rappers had us heard past
comic clowns that be making shit sounds and laughs
then they facing masteries, just fitting lack of pieces
whats dope and hope that we accept the whack atheists, jesus
Wheres the chamber? Allow me to become the scum rearanger
they said "focus ya anger" and bring the rhymes that you wrote
because these folks will hang ya
I accepted their concerns turn to him and said
"fuck the written shit I'll flip that kid off the head"
What about the feds? Ayo we left them a decoy
We didn't need the beats to know we we brought back the B-Boy
[chorus]
Hip, Hip-Hop (i'm a bring it back) 4x

can't form unbiest opinion because I only listen to rock and roll, and anything good that was written between 1960 and 2000. I might listen to a few songs written after that if I Really like it, but most of what I like is because of the beat so I can't really tell you if I like it unless you can show me the beat.

it will be a while, i do the beat last, and i still need more lyrics

wrote down some more lyrics what ya think

[verse 2]
hip hop is so whack, the beats are fighting back
And i was sent to attack, so i'm following the map
X's mark the rappers out with two head
Furocious cademies that only need with the next spliff
Step by step i'm headed toward the set to analyze the threat
and make him regret, the day we met
i suspect he got a smooth box i head into the rooftops
where i'll make me strategy so i can splatter them
they where only half of them, five less rappers alive
so we can vibe the stand and then, dope they didn't coincide
they where half religous,and vicous,with dark wishes
which is to assure the core of hip hop which is snitches
i dropped dimes on how to travel back in time
so they can melt and miss the nine pioneers patterns to rhyme
and i'm furious, seething at what i'm seeing
soon those niggaz won't be breathing
i've seen what i got so i'm leaving
cause i wanna, set up to stop up for the evening
niggaz hopped on my shit list with a swiftness
i'm about to rip this come fear witness
[beat plays for about 20 seconds]
[beat changes]

i'm finishing the song here's the rest

[continues rapping]

mic check!
we had ill static,over illmatic, i reached for it
this nigga said i couldn't have it
so tragic they try to counter the magic, i'm rapid
i reached for his fucking face and grabbed it
nigga, how the fuck did you figure
you can interfere with the music so potent
that i need to just go for a moment
before i moved on.
then i heard two songs
spit flavor from those head up the 36 chambers
i'm about to bring this nigga danger
he was illucife and uncle tom carry a nuisance
strong and spiritualy useless
i gave him flash backs, of niggas getting treated like lab rats
beatin with sticks and straps
Hidden with conscience, held a mirror to his face
the motherfucker jetted out of the place
Who's next to get me vexed this rapper making idle threats
claming that he got contacts, i stepped to him slow
looked deep in his eyes, see another person was within him
cause he's living a lie
a rap nearly operation
told him that mans was not meant to leave earths population
these talks left him pacing, now he's suffers from brain disentergration
No thoughts of information, it started raining, visibility low
this had no effects on my abilities though

A 10 year old shouldn't be swearing like this..

for the last fucking time, i'm not a ten year old

(Oh, yeah it's been a year your 11)

did you not pay any attention to me while i was posting in the elder scrolls rp

Sorry, I sometimes I can't understand your grade 1 grammar and spelling.

fuck you ass hole

Cool story bro, you should tell it at parties.

got a new song i'm writting

Usually i'm at the bottom of the sea, dorment
but every now and then i call upon the torment
so i emerge, feel the rays of the sun surge with power
then prepare to tear and devour
and after that's understood i let my sounds blare like underwood
after this, lightning and thunder clouds coud
crashin the sky and project down to the terrain
the heat makes blood boil in your veins
waves of energy channel through your feet to form a beat
Rally back your troops, retreat
Abort the mission and admit defeat
you're weak fuck a backup plan, delete
cause after the mega charge
i grow mega large
increase in size so no one survives
you can't believe what you see before your eyes
yes, the god [whatever i decide to call myself] has returned to terrorize
Armed forces came out ready to brawl
But at a hundred stories tall niggas look small
This is the part where i stop king kong
Rip through the city, crush and romp
the ship sailed? at my frame but hit the flesh
My eye beam connects, burns shit up and wrecks
Lyrical teks, slash necks
Blood splatters all over my specs
Body parts are found in tape decks
So visual you can't watch the scene
If you press stop the gears lock and pop spleen
Then I start to finish em
I have broken out the heavy artillery

Isn't that an actual song? As in it's already been written...

Yea the kid just finds lyrics online then acts like their his...

why you guys so hard on him?? i really dont understand why you must be so mean :\

Because the kids an asshole who doesn't know how to rp.

And if your german why are you using the "n" word in your song kid?

ohhh well i never rped with him and dont talk to him so yaa, and he using nigga while hes german woww i happen to be one and really sumtimes it ticks me off just a little

ryon shut up please i'm an ass hole your the one sitting at your computer dissing someone you don't know you little bitch
your a mother fucker who thinks he's rich
you think your on cloud nine
while i shine
the bitch on the floor
while i open the door
to a hot bitch, then we take a walk on the shore
i'm flying high
you let out a sigh
cause you got a girl drunk
and she still wouldn't get in bed to fuck

yo Knightmare
shut up bitch, no body cares
about the shit you're spittin'
you think your shit is bitchin'
think you smell good while shittin'
but you don't you know
you live a life so low
and everyone who knows you
really thinks you're slow
they pretend your cool
but you are just some tool
who thinks he's Usher
but you ain't
you should change your name to M.C.Flusher
because your raps are shit
your a German Twit
it's like the candle in your head
was never Lit.
and if you think I'm done
well, you would be right
'cause I don't have time
to spout the truth all night.
I got a life.
*drops the mic*

I think little German boy just got pwned

:O NICEEE Holmes ^///^ Im impressed! But then again. . most rapping is impressive to someone(me) who can't rap. xD

oh will you guys stop fighting this is dumb. this is supposed to be a site where we rp, and make friends, not dis people just cuz they said a few things wrong, lied, or made a few mistake. we are human we all make mistakes that we regret and wish we could change. also there will all ways be the people that like to get under your skin, but please just try to ignore it ok. i am sorry but i have felt that i need to say something about the fighting.

yo holmes shut up
i'm stepping up to the plate
i don't think my stuff is shitting
if your rapping me you know what will happen
your gonna become mr.watson
it's elementary that i'm the best
so how but you go sit down with the rest
up in the audience
your losing your guidance
that rap was whack
that you got no feedback
the audience fell asleep
my rhymes makes a mountain that's so steep
when the words fall they bury in my oponets deep
i'm sorry i gotta go
i'm sorry that i must bravo

Aww' Windylight. I think everyone has to vent out; and fighting isnt all that bad. Plus I'm sure no one holds it agiasnt one another when it happens. People get over it just as soon as the fight ends. That's what rping is about; >:D Pretending and having funn. Sooner or later theres ganna be collisions.

i understand what your saying jenah i just want to stop it before it becomes a war.

A war on the Threads 0-0 I'd love to see that xDD lmao sorta jking. . .

lol XD

I was gonna rap one out, but you know, I am going to be the better man and just tell you straight up that your raps don't even follow rythm you just spout words that you think sound pretty together, when really it is an appoling abomination. if you want to get some talent how about you let R Kelly Piss on you, not sure how it would work, but you could take the lyrics to the song "Piss on me, R kelly" like you do with all your other raps.

you know what i don't care the raps you lay suck. i'm gonna leave, 'cause i know that your scared. why else would you go. you are fucking white boy, and you rap like one too